Soyala Amaya

I know, I know, blatant thread bump, but somebody critique this! Incan, Hunter, Firestarter...shred please!

Allright, allright, I know, blatant thread bump but...I want so good ciritque! Come on Incan, firestarter, hunter! I kill your pieces all the time! Shred this one!

I feel so...defined. And like I should shoot myself because my life is shit. Good job! Only thing I got to say is, instead of bolding that last line, put ...

yay Snoink! Another Spanish poetry buff! And, if you can, go ahead and translate them. I don't know enough Spanish yet to really make it say what I want, so ...

Thanks for the nice reviews, I made some changes, but some things I left. The imagery with the pennies from heaven is becausde that'sthe song that was on my radio ...

Hello! Well, I have more time now to explain things. A few ears ago I,erm, kind of went crazy. As in CRAZY. I heard oices, saw things, burnt, cut, and ...

All right, first off, this is in sci-fi because of the descrips put on the board, this seemed most acurate -written about sometime in the future. And second...huh? Dude, I ...

*blink blink* I guess that comment exspersses my life to a T...well written ramble. That's me all over. I really have to figure out when to end a poem...I just ...

Tess, thanks, I was going to say the same thing. Even my parental hates the school counseler. And I have to talk to her. Once a week. Blast it all. ...

Interesting imagery, the whole internet love thing. Very 'in' at the moment with all these people falling in love with a font, so to speak. The way you bring the ...

I thought so. I was just making sure, ya know? Still, very nice use of Roget (or whoever you used).

*snuggles back the Tessitore* Thanks everyone, I guess I did better on these than I thought…like I said, just too close to me to see correctly. *hugs back all the ...

Thanks you two, but please, I know these need some work. I found a few places myself and went in an edited. I just know there are things I'm missing ...

Heh heh, thanks T-square. I'd almost forgotten that this was the piece I read there! How were people reacting? I couldn't see very well, and I was most concerned with ...

Erm...seems scary. Rather morbid, obsessive, somewhat like an ex of mine. Still, Misty's seems empty. Like you want to feel these things, but you're just fooling yourself. Again, rather like ...